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 Chan Wai Leong gives an account of what he calls the 'gender revolution' (11S15) (72)

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Chan Wai Leong gives an account of what he calls the 'gender revolution' (11S15)

To what extent do you agree or disagree with his views? Support your answer with examples drawn from your society's experience of the 'gender revolution'.

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5 points

In Paragragh 6, Chan states that the high divorce rates can be minimised if people comprehend the differences between both genders. His stand may be appealing to some society- especially those that cannot understand and accept the variation between the males and the females. Yet, this point is invalid to many society. One have to first realise that divorce cases are attributed to a panoply of reasons, say, infidelity; it is not just one's lack of understanding of the differences in both male and female. Take Singapore for an example. Many divorce cases were due to the lack of love being exchanged between the couples. This is due to the urbanised country we are living in, and both males and females need to work to support their family. In the end, both lose interest in each other, resulting in a divorce incident. Hence, Chan's argument is not critical enough as he fails to look into the complexity of the issue of high divorce rates.

Reuben(5) Clarified
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Actually on second thought, you make sense.

Understanding the difference a between genders, and being able to accept these differences are two seperate issues.

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Interesting comments, Yew Fei! Good thinking/argument shown

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Your argument was good in countering what the writer's point. Don't limit your arguement within the working factors, Sociatal influences will provide a bigger scope to your argument.

coconutr33(10) Disputed
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I find that you have misunderstood about the notion of infidelity. Infidelity occurs when a person, with a spouse, gets into a seperate relationship with another person. Although it seems like a lack of love that has created this instance of infidelity, but isn't the occurance of this carnal impulse due to gender differences? For instance, in historical times, men practised polygamy in many societies while women were objectified as a vessel of life. However, in today, such a historial notion of polygamy, which arises due to gender differences, has clashed with modern values of commitment. Hence, to say that divorces occur due to infidelity, is to imply that there is a lack of understanding between historial differences in gender differences, contextualised in modernity. Thus, rather than disputing, you example supports his claim. devotedevotedevote

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I agree with your argument where his perspective can be seen as myopic as it has failed to include developed countries!

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It is true, you have similar points as coconutree. However, i feel it will if you have more examples to support your points. But overall, your argument is valid.

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The author claims that divorce rate can be reduced through improved understanding of gender difference, which seems largely myopic as it seems to reduce the complexity of the divorce to one mere factor. In reality, divorces are caused by a multitude of problems characterized by the cultural context of the society one is focusing on. For instance, in Singapore, divorce has occurred not just because of gender differences, but is fueled by the economic pragmatism relatable to all Singaporeans, independent of their genders. This is evident in the working lifestyles of Singaporeans where they are found to have the longest working hours in the world. This implies that family time is sacrificed for economic progress which in terms lead to a souring relationship between couples. Hence, in this case, the way to reduce the tension between working lifestyles and relationships between couples is to actually slow down the economic progress or provide more time for couples to bond. As a result, since the cause of divorce does not stem from gender differences, the claim that divorce rate can be reduced through better understanding is actually a generalization that is only applicable in societies where such differences are salient in creating cracks between couples.

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Cool stuiff i support your arguement! because i agree that the increase in pace of life due to economic progress is the mian reason to the increase in divorce rates, therefore there is such a trend in developed countries.

angelsong(114) Clarified
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'since the cause of divorce does not stem from gender differences'

Shouldn't it be 'since the cause of divorce does not ONLY stem from gender differences'?

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Yes Madam, that was what I meant in my essay

ineedtofillin50words

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True, i find it convincing =D I find it agreeable because marriage is not totally made up of gender. Other factors like love, feelings and commitments play a part in making marriage possible. Likewise, failure in marriage needs more factors and not mainly be cause by gender differences. Understanding gender differences may not be able to improve divorce rates.

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7. Khalis

Chan Wai Leong argued that there is a need for children to be taught gender education and not just sex education in schools. Gender revolution is changing rapidly and often have gone unrecognised and unacknowledged. Sex education only covers the physical and biological differences between males and females. However this is not enough. Gender education also have to be implemented to teach children about the psychological differences between the two. I agree with his view that gender education should be taught. In Singapore, there has been a significant increase in the number of divorce rates. One of the main causes for this is the lack of understanding between married couples which eventually leads to failed relationships. This may be dentrimental to Singapore's economy as broken families would result in the children suffering from psychological problems. As such, they would not do well in school and would not gain employment in the tertiary and quaternary sector. Thus, with gender education being taught to Singaporeans at a much younger age, they would be able to have a greater understanding of the opposite sex. Hence this may be solution to reduce the divorce rates in Singapore.

angelsong(114) Clarified
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'One of the main causes for this is the lack of understanding between married couples which eventually leads to failed relationships.' - don't you need to SHOW how this lack of understanding is directly related to lack of understanding between men & women? - need to do this before talking about consequences

Reuben(5) Clarified
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Children from broken families will result in psychological problems?

Assumption much?

I guess familiy issues play a significant role in the childs psychological aspect, but to say that it would definitely lead to problems in a big big assumption. ( I think )

Cause some of them might actually turn out quite well, due to their motivation of not wanting to grow up to be like their parents.

Also, understanding the oppostie sex does not always make it easier to accept them.

For all we know, the new understanding we gain of the opposite sex may actually make it harder for us to accept them.

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Broken families lead to psycological problems in children? Some assumptions there.

A better way for improverment will be how can we go about integrating both sexual and gender education so to better benefit the younger generation.

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Chan wai leong claims that technology replaces manpower, therefore there is no need for strength, women can also contribute in jobs.

I fully agree with this statement put forth by Chan wai leong as i believe that technology can negate some disadvantages women posses in relation to men at the work place. For example, technology advancement can make men's superior brute strength obsolete. Machinery can allow women to contribute in jobs that could be otherwise impossible due to disadvantages in strength.

For example, women now can be trained to operate machinery to be able to work in the construction sector such as crane operates. In the context of Singapore, technological advancement in the military sector now allow women to better arm and equip themselves to protect our homeland which may seem impossible in the past. This opens up a whole new sector for women to contribute work in.

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Not bad:) Quite well explained- with relevant examples. But, you might want to link back to the question?

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A sound argument. You might want consider the generation difference that many developed countries have changed from labour to captial intensive market. Such provides more opportunity for the females.

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1. GR has become a norm in society (everywhere, affecting everyone)

Indeed, gender revolution has become a norm in society today. The pursue of human rights nowadays has enpowered individuals to challenge the conventional beliefs in the past. As society progresses. the differences between women and men in terms of intellectual capacity were reduced. This has allowed women to acheive simiar standings as men today. The widespread gender revolution nowadays happen because of the biasness the women have endured since civilisation started. As depicted by the author, women were bounded to their spouses and have to obey everything he says. The extend of such thinking made people believe that women are supposed to take care of the family while the husband are the main breadwinner. This may be the injustices women have been feeling for many years. With globalisation and an age of informational boom, women have taken this chance to voice out their discontentment and asked for changes to the ways they are treated. A more apparent example in Singapore today that shows the conflict between genders would be the recent general election on May last year 2011. New female candidates were proven to be popular to the general public. Candidates like Tin Pei Ling or Nicole Seah were the prominent females that have participated in the general election and were not being fearful of the conventional mindset that politics are only for the males. This male-dominated political sphere in Singapore has indeed faced some revolution from the females. Thus, changes have been made in different factions of society, ranging from job opportunites to promotions because the gender revolution would be harder to contain or resolve if it is not mitigated swiftly.

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Good explanation ;) Example on the politics in Singapore shows effectively that GR has become a norm in society because in the past, all the candidates were men. Might want to add on that the differences between women and men in terms of intellectual capacity came about due to the increasing opportunity for women to be educated.

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good elaboration! lyou link back to singapore is impressive

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Good example given on Singapore GE! However your evalution can be improve by explaining how conventional beliefs has supress women from freedom in terms of power since your example is on political power. Further, it will be better if you state your stand in his statement.

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I agree with the example stated in the recently concluded general elections. It shows that women entering the political sphere has shown much impact and reaction from the public. AS in, it affects the rise in status of women in general to be able to be involved in political affairs. Though, you could have better state how "conventional beliefs" have deprived women of their freedom and injustice in terms of how they are treated.

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Well done! It is well-argued with in depth explanation and relevant examples.

angelsong(114) Clarified
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'Thus, changes have been made in different factions of society, ranging from job opportunites to promotions because the gender revolution would be harder to contain or resolve if it is not mitigated swiftly.' - please check how you should use the word 'mitigate' - only applies to lessening impact of negative things. Therefore, not the correct word to use here!

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We need gender education in addition to sex education - to teach children not just biological/physical differences, but also psychological differences between males and females. Sex ed basically teaches us on how each of our reproductive system works and why both genders have sexual intercourse. It also tells us what and why we should or should not do with our body at an early age. Such education helps youngsters at primary and lower secondary school children debunk myths about the opposite sex and whilst learning more of their own. However, sex ed can be shallow to help the younger generation further understand the underlying reason why both genders are different in their own unique ways. Despite the technological advancements in our society and in this world which led to both males and females having equal opportunites and equal working status in society, there are still different mindsets and thinkings among both sexes. Learning about the reproductive organs of both sexes will not help people of this generation especially the young ones to understand the different connotations between both sexes. In some countries or societies, females need to be loyal to their husbands and will be stoned to death if they are found to are extramarital affairs. In some, females are regarded as the homemaker and their job is to stay at home to take care of the children and the family. On the other hand, males are the breadwinner and their main jobs is to bring home to money to feed their wives and children. This is esp. so in Asian Countries. Sex ed is also very prevalent in DCs as the govt makes it mandatory in the education system. For example, in SG, all pri students have to undergo sex ed, however the impact of the sex talk is not very great as it is superficial. We, students have all undertook this talk and frankly it does not really affect our thinking of the other gender. Therefore, gender ed in addition to sex ed will further improve and clarify the thoughts and misconceptions of one, and hence reducing the impacts and effects of gender discrimination and induce gender revolution!

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Sex Education is not exactly superficial.

in does help in helping us understand the various aspects of sex and so on.

However, in the area of gender education. i would agree that sexual education is limited in helping us to understand the other gender psyhocologically.

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Chan Wai Leong states that birth control has allowed women to control the size of their family and therefore, go to work. Also, it is also stated that due to the advancements in technology, manual labour is replaced by machines which previously could only be done by our male counterparts, this allows women to be able to work in this sector. However, i disagree with Chan's view that this is the main reason why women chose to limit their families to focus on their work instead. I believe that the introduction of better education and hence opportunities for women is the main cause. Presently, a good education system would cause women to be more ambitious with their lives and thus to achieve higher goals in their work and achievements. In addition, people with little or no education may not have access to the knowledge of such birth control methods, thereby eliminating the fact of even the use of it. In my society, Singapore, the high literacy rate and access the advanced technology such as the various birth control methods ultimately lead to a decrease a birth rate. This is due to the fact that women, whom are more educated, are able to compete with men in the corporate world. This gives rise to an increase in the number of ambitious women who wants to limit their families in order to progress further in the career. Therefore, the introduction of education is the cause.

angelsong(114) Disputed
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'In my society, Singapore, the high literacy rate and access the advanced technology such as the various birth control methods ultimately lead to a decrease a birth rate. This is due to the fact that women, whom are more educated, are able to compete with men in the corporate world.'

Cause and effect very strange! Check reasoning.

'Therefore, the introduction of education is the cause.'

Better to write 'Therefore, the introduction of education is the main cause of .....' state exact full point you are referring to!

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In paragraph 7, Chan claimed that we still possess the same mindsets as our grandparents, despite technological advances. This means that we are still conservative and has stereotype about gender. I agree with his statement. Although we became more 'open', some of our old beliefs and thoughts are still deep-rooted in pur mind. One example of such thoughts and beliefs is gender role. In most country, especially in Asia, women are supposed to do household and take care of children. Although women are allowed to enter work, once they are married and they have children, it becomes more difficult for them to work outside as they are expected to take care of children and household at the same time. Six out of 10 working Korean women quit their jobs when they get married, and half of working mothers eventually decide to stay at home after having their first child, reports Chosun (March 23). Korea once practised Confucianism and women in Korea are still expected to do household and raise children. This stereotyoe about women taking care of household deters women from having jobs eventually results in gender inequality in terms of work. This example of Korean women shows that we are still stuck in the mindsets of our grandparents and hence I agree with Chan's statement.

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Quite good use of examples that consistently refers to point under discussion. Good job!

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Point is well developed, with good examples as well ;) But you can improve it further by giving examples of technological advances and explaining it with people still having the same mindsets as our grandparents.

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Good evalution on why we still possess the same mindset as our grandparents because of tradition values and thinking. Your example is also well supported with stastistics. However, you did not elaborate why and how technological advancement not lead to gender revolution.

Good try :)

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Good illustration of point with relevant examples. It is the traditional thinking that we can't change even after such a long period of time of revolution. Perhaps adding examples from the West or US will be better to show that even liberalised societies still have that same mindset?

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Chan wai leong claims that with advancement in techonology, more women are able to come out to work in the society. I agree with this statement as women can cope with the jobs that are now not as strenuous. The industrial revolution about 200 years ago has led to great inventions such as steam engines that harness the power of water, steam, oil and electricity to replace hard labour. As a result jobs have become less labour intensive, giving both genders equal opportunities for employment. Jobs have also become more technical, suiting to the abilities of women. Thus, with suitable job vacancies, more women are able to work and earn extra income for their family.

Clive Clarified
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I agree to most of your points but what do you mean by suiting the abilities of the women? You can further say that females are able to work due to increased and equal opportunites of education. And that females are regarded as equal with males in a family structure due to gender revolution, women have further reasons and oppotunities to work.

cherylong Disputed
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Can be better by stating more examples from own society (Singapore).

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Chan Wai Leong claims that the introduction of birth-control techniques is of the reasons that led to gender revolution. I agree with this statement as with birth-control techniques, women are able to put a limit to their families, thereby leaving them more time which presents them the opportunity to enter the workforce. Take the case of Singapore as an example, it is prevalent in Singapore's society so much so that there are increasing concerns for the low population growth rate and are currently experiencing aging population. This is because with birth-control techniques, some families may choose to and are able to delay and have children at a later stage after their marriage. As such, women get to enter the world of work and develop in this area. This can also be applicable to in the developing countries like India and China as programmes like family planning were implemented together with poverty-reduction policies to assist families in the rural areas to help them improve their standard of living - by reducing their burden of raising many children and to free them up to provide them jobs, thereby resulting gender revolution.

angelsong(114) Clarified
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'it is prevalent in Singapore's society' - what exactly does 'it' refer to here? You need to write more precisely.

'have children at a later stage after their marriage. As such, women get to enter the world of work and develop in this area.' - no flow in logical connection

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good example on Singapore. maybe you can also elaborate briefly on how being able to delay having children actually allow working women who are married to continue to focus and strive in their work. for example like how it allows them to have less worries and distractions about thier family or children.

for the example of india, i think birth control and its effect of reducing poverty did not help much in allowing women to enter the work field, as many of the women did not enter the work field mostly because of the stereotype on them.

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Chan claimed that we still possess the same mindsets as our grandparents despite technological advances over the years. In my perspective, I agree with his stand that the majority of us are still functioning on a traditional mindset where the different genders focus on their stereotypical job scopes despite machineries being built to aid in the labour intensive work. However, there has been an improvement where there is an increase in the number of women in the work force as compared to before. Despite this, this increase still remains insignificant in certain jobs, particularly jobs that require hard labour. In Singapore, it can be seen that a large number of men as compared to women are involved in jobs that require labour. This is evident through the workers at construction sites where it is seen to be male dominated despite machines such as cranes used to help in the labour intensive work. Hence, this shows that technology advances do not necessarily reform our perception regarding the expected gender roles conditioned before as the number of women in labour intensive work has not change significantly. Therefore, I believe that technology does not play a vital role in gender revolution.

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Sup, your stand is relevant to the qns however i think you could state how machinery has affected the gender revolution as well, than compare it with how it does not help so it does not look too one-sided.

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Chan claims that high divorce rate due to gender conflict, can be resolved with the understanding of the two's differences. i personally believe that this claim is too simplistic and thus disagree with this statement. The difference between the two might not be the only reason as to why couples choose to end their marriage. Other factors such as busy work schedule of both parties, infidelity or even abusive behavior of one party might also be the reason for the high divorce rate. thus, it is too simplistic to say that just by solving the gender difference, the high divorce rate would be resolved. take Singapore for example. nowadays it is common to see young Singaporeans getting married at a young age. however, some of them are not well prepared for all the consequences of marriage and after a few years, they ended up divorce. therefore, other reasons also contributed to the high divorce and this cannot be resolved just by having a better understanding of the differences between the two sexes.

maziyah(4) Disputed
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You mentioned, "nowadays it is common to see young Singaporeans getting married at a young age."

Isn't Singapore facing a decreasing birth rate? Simply because people are too occupied with their hectic work schedule and hence, unable to get married early? (In addition to those married couples who refuse to have children)

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Divorce rates may still be as high because even if there is an understanding of the opposite gender, the thinkings and trends of this era may be just continue forcing the divorce rates to increase.

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Chan claims that birth control is one of the factor contributes to gender revolution.

He believes that birth control has allowed women to control family size and therefore, women have opportunity to work.His arguement is supported by people in developed countries such as United States Of America, United Kingdom and other places which allow contraceptions. People in these countries believe that birth control has led to gender revolution because the stautes of women were no longer housewives that were kept at home and look after the children. Now with birth control methods such as contraceptive pills, condoms or abortion which allow women to control the size of the family have given women more free time to do things they favour such as cooking, baking or sewing. In Singapore, the country which allows birth control has empower women in the work force to have an equal footing with men. This is beacuse most women are equally qualified as men in terms of education standards which allow them to work in high positions in the work force. However, in order to stay competitve with men in the cooperate ladder, most married women choose to use birth control to have a smaller family while putting more focus at work. Thus, i support Chan's statement with context of Singapore. This is because birth control has given women opportunities to work in the paternal society which eventually contributes to gender revolution.

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you might want to elaborate more on the explanation as to why allowing birth control has lead to the empowerment of women. you also only stated the opinion of other people but haven't state whether you agree with his statement. and you could have elaborated more on the example of singapore.

Sohyeon(6) Disputed
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So what is your stand? do you agree with Chan's statement or not? you should give your statement.

and its 'birth control has led to gender revolution' not 'birth control has lead to gender revolution'

'the stautes of women were no longer housewives that were kept at home and look after the children. ' i feel that this sentence is a bit weird.. you can improve it..

But I think giving Singapore as an example was quite good..

KelvinGoh(5) Disputed
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It would be better not to end with reasons, but a clear link back to the point you are trying to convince.

FeliciaLim(4) Clarified
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You said that contraceptive pills, condoms or abortion have given women more free time to do things they favour such as cooking, baking or sewing. But I don't think this has anything to do with gender revolution, because gender revolution implies that more women are going to work. So you should say how this has given women more time to focus on work, which you did later :D So I don't think you should write that sentence :)

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Chan claims that "gender education needs to supplement mere sex education in school." Here, he emphasises the need to teach students not just biological/physical differences between man and woman but also psychological differences between them. This will help students realise that since a relationship is built on both physical and emotional connections, it is important to be informed of these gender differences so as to better understand and complement one another. Moreover, by targeting this education at students, we are able to cultivate them from a young age into more mature, aware and capable students in terms of building relationships with the opposite sex. In the Singaporean context, although there have been advances in sexuality education, it is still rather shallow in the sense that it does not involve gender education. The Ministry of Education needs to realise the importance of gender education and how it supplements sexuality education, so that Singaporean students are provided with a more well-rounded and holistic view of the issue.

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I agree fully, because i did the same point as you. Good elaboration and clear explanation.

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Can be further improved by stating your own stand, whether you agree with chan's statement. you gave good explanation that linked back to the question. maybe you might also want to state what are the sexual education that the students are learning.

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good job babe. well elaborated. talked abt Singapore's point of view whoo

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Can be improved further by stating your stand. Other than that, good elaboration :D

ShawnChinny Disputed
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THIS IS SO WRONG PREYA HOW CAN U STATE THAT THE GOVERNMENT HAS NOT BEEN SENDING PEOPLE TO EDCUATE THE STUDENTS?! I THINK THAT GENDER EDUCATION SHOULD BE TAUGHT BY PARENTS AS THEY BRING UP THEIR CHILDREN AS SUCH VALUES CAN ONLY BE TAUGHT WHEN THEIR YOUNG!!!

GET YOUR FACTS RIGHT!!!!!

preya(8) Clarified
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SO WHAT IF THEY ARE YOUNG. THEY CAN BE TAUGHT ALL THESE SINCE KINDERGARTEN, PRIMARY SCH ALL THE WAY TO JC/POLY WHAT

maziyah(4) Disputed
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Perhaps you could link back to how both sexuality and gender education could assist in gender revolution to emphasize on the extent of importance towards gender education.

Haha and Shawn, don't be annoying.

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Point agreed. Good elaboration. However, to allow the supplement of gender education to mere sex education, do consider the budget and costs that schools need to come up with to hire professionals/experts to provide this well-rounded education. So, your point is valid, in a way, schools need to provide all this for their students but are they capable of doing so with that amount of budget they have? And plus, it depends on the level of maturity of the students to be accepting of the information transmitted to them.

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According to Chan Wai Leong, the gender revolution has become a norm in society today. Many people would have agreed with him as there is an increasing number of societies opening up to the idea of providing equal opportunites to women. Companies are more willing to hire female workers and schloarships are given based on merits, regardless of gender. In addition, empowering women is one of the UN Millienium Goals, thus, people agree with Chan Wai Leong's view that gender revolution is the norm today.

However, this is not true because women from countries in conservative societies such as India still suffer from discrimination. For example, in most Middle East countries, women cannot drive without men watching over them because they are deemed to be unsafe drivers. Moreover, women cannot be seen together with men alone, other than their husbands, fathers or brothers. This is due to the conventional thinking that it is an indecent act to be interacting with the opposite gender, and it only applies to women. With such restrictions and limited freedom, many women today still have to be very careful in their words and actions. Furthermore, inferring from the results of the US Presidential Election in 2008, there is a sense of insecurity in people to let a woman lead the country and hence Hilrary Clinton lost to Barrack Obama in the election.

Therefore, with discrimination against women in many parts of the world, even in a liberal society such as the US, how can we agree with the view that there is gender revolution occurring?

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good elaboration and good example!

However, the part that says 'Hilrary Clinton lost to Barrack Obama in the election because she is a woman' doesn't seems right. that may be small reason for the defeat but mainly it is not. Different people have many different reasons for not voting and thus it is not right to come to a conclusion that American didn't vote for Clinton because she is a woman

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Chan Wai Leong claims that management style changed from confrontation to cooperative women feel at ease at workplace. I disagree with this statement because such claim is stereotypical. Not all women that are being cooperative feel at ease at workplace as it is evident that women have also shown confrontation style in their work too. For example, there are women who fight for their work for a status in their workplace which proves them not being cooperative women as the author claims. These women usually want to demand equality with men at work as they are the ones that enter the world of work much later than men. So, they wish to have an equal chance to complete with men in today's competitive world, which makes them aggressive at work. On the other hand, there are men that prefer to have co-operational style at work, rather than confrontation style. This is because there will be more work productivity as compared to a person who did his job individually. Therefore, I believe that the difference in management style will not affect the different gender.

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yeah math!

Change in management style most likely affects different kinds of PEOPLE, and not just women, as it talks about different preferences of working style, which are not limited to women alone.

Clive Disputed
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Firstly, females enter the world of work earlier than men because men have National Service. Next, I agree that there are females who want a high status in their work and will fight for it. However, in the passage, the author clearly states that confrontational management has "largely" given way to co-op enterprises, which mean that there may still be confrontational and aggressive manners at work.

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- Khalis

A good argument given. However, you could give a specific example to Singapore's modern society today and not just elaborate on it as a whole

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Not bad; you manage to cover a wide perspective of the whole issue.

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Chan Wai Leong claims that Technology is one of the key factors that contribute to gender revolution. I agree with this statement because as ways of doing things has become more mechanised, it allows women to be involved in the workforce without having to use the element of strength, which is a dominant characteristic in most men. This was illustrated in the past when people carry out manual labour such as hunting and also jobs that are classified under primary industries such as mining and farming, during which Technology has yet to make its presence known to the world. Therefore, in the past, women were unable to commit themselves to jobs as they do not have the same capabilities as men and hence not able to earn themselves a decent income. However, in the modern society of Singapore that we live in today, we realise that Technology has become more developed. This is especially when more machineries were put in place in various industries such as engineering and manufacturing industries, that has indeed replaced manual labour in the past. Therefore, women are able to be actively working because they are able to utilise the strengths they have and expand their potential be it in the form of leadership or management skills which are essential in ensuring the progress of a particular country or an industry. Furthermore, as women get involved in operating such high-tech machineries, they are simultaneously upgrading themselves in terms of skills and status. Hence allowing women to achieve an equal standing as men in terms of their capabilities and are no longer regarded as incompetent in the eyes of the society.

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good explanations and elaborations. you were also able to link the explanations back to the question and answers the question. good examples were also given to elaborate on the point that you are justifying:)

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clear explanation and good link back to singapore haha :))

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Chan Wai Leong states that management style changed from confrontation to cooperative – women feel at ease at workplace. In this statement, he seems to claim that men are confrontation in workplace while women, on the other hand, are cooperative. However, I disagree with this statement as not all men are confrontation in workplace and there are still women who are aggressive in work. There are still female bosses that are dictatorship. for instances, Margaret Thatcher, the Iron Lady of Great Britain.

WinnieNg(7) Clarified
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The emphasis of this point that you're arguing for is whether the change in management style allowed women to feel at ease at workplace and hence providing them opportunities to work and not revolve around whether women can be aggressive or not.

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yeah. Winnie is right , Qijing you need to evaluate how the change of management at work has allow women to work in the society and thus led to gender revolution.

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Hi i think you can elaborate more on your point and include examples relating to Singapore :)

cherylong Disputed
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This paragraph can be improved by stating more examples, including some examples from our own society. On top of that, you can also further elaborate on the examples that you stated, such as what Margaret Thatcher do to show that she is a dictorship boss.

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Hello I did the same the point as you haha, but I agreed :) Anyway I think you should explain whether you agree with the point that because management stlyes has changed from confrontation to cooperative and that's why women feel more ease at work. And you should include examples from Singapore too :D

Sohyeon(6) Disputed
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the example is good but you could have elaborated more.

You have to explain more why Margaret Thatcher is suitable to be one of your example...

and your argument is incomplete!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Chan claims that we still possess the same mindsets as our grandparents,despite technological advances. I largely agree with this point. There are still some people who treats women unequally due to past mindsets. In the Middle East, women are still being suppresed and not allowed equal rights. Laws against marital rape and spousal abuse are largely absent in the region, the so-called "honor" killings persist, and segregation and discrimination are still prevalent in educational and political institutions. These happens mainly because of the religion the people in Middle East have. As a result of their religion, they have the mindset that women are not supposed to be given equal rights as men. In Singapore's context, there are also some people with similar mindsets. Women working in the civil service are given unequal medical benefits and this have led to the perception that women are contributing less in the public sector. Throughout the years, the surname of a child follows the father and not the mother. In the past, people believed that doing so will pass down the family's name and do their ancestors proud. The unequal treatment of women in the Middle East is mostly due to religion, while in Singapore, the reason for unequal treatment of women is mostly due to tradition.

Huixin(3) Clarified
2 points

Is there unequal treatment of women in Singapore? You are receiving education just as much as the boys here as the system here is based on merits, not gender. Perhaps you are referring to private companies who are not as willing to hire women for the fear of paying for maternity leave?

1 point

Chan claims that management style changed from confrontation to cooperative, and as a result women can feel at ease at the workplace. It has been scientifically proven that men are more analytical and systematic in workplaces, while women are more sensitive and better empathizers. Hence I agree that women will be more comfortable when the management style is cooperative. This is true in Singapore where efforts have been made to change the management stlye. This has resullted in more women climbing up the cooperate ladder, in both private and public sectors in Singapore. For example, many forums for women have been taking place, such as the Women Entrepreneurship Forum 2009 and the Singapore Women's congress 2004. These forums make managment style more cooperative such that they can learn from other successful women entrepreneurship.

chuting(4) Clarified
2 points

You have provided examples on women but what about men? I think examples of men in workplaces are more important as they had more say in the past and they had to relent for the style to become cooperative. And i think you havent explained fully why women are more comfortable in cooperative management style.

KelvinGoh(5) Clarified
1 point

so? You can elaborate more by comparing men and women with their different management style.

0 points

In paragragh 1, Chan claims that Gender revolution has become a norm in society that is found everywhere and it affects everyone, however, I disagree with his view. Many people stereotype that men are expected to work mostly outside the home and help provide for their family, while women are expected to stay near or at home and care for the children, and to work in and around the house. However, in our society, women are stepping up in society to match up with the males' ability. For example, women now receive the same education as the males in Singapore instead of the norm of staying at home to do house chores. More women are working outside the home, which contradicts Chan's statement that Gender revolution is found everywhere.

WinnieNg(7) Clarified
2 points

You disagreed that Gender Revolution has become a norm in society, hence the paragraph should include justifications to why gender revolution is not the norm in society. For your paragraph, it looked as though u disagree it and then u counter it and says that 'women are stepping up in society to match up with the males' ability'.

coconutr33(10) Disputed
1 point

Although you disagree with Chan's claim, your paragraph seems largely supportive of the claim. For instance, the fact that you mention both men and women have a fair chance of being educated means that the gender revolution has affected them. Also, the shift from domestic workers to out-of-home workers also support Chan's claim that gender revolution has become a norm. All in all, I find your argument contradicting and confusing.